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The gragh below shows the changes in production of three products in a garment factory

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This
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 line graph illustrates the changes in
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production
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 of three kinds of clothes in a garment factory between 1990 and 2010.
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, it is clear from the graph that all three products showed upward trends.
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, the
production
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 of
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coat
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coats
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 demonstrated the most significant growth. In 1990, the factory produced 15
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 suits, higher than dresses and coats, which were 10
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 and around 7.5
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 respectively. From 1990 to 1995, all three
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 rose, and the amount of suit
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 peaked at about 23
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 in 1995,
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 the figure for
coat
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production
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 surpassed that of dress. Over the period from 1995 to 2005, the
production
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 of
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coat
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coats
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 went up and overtook the figure for suits, which declined throughout the period.
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, the amount of dress
production
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fluctuate
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 slightly. In 2010, the
production
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 of
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coat
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coats
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 reached its peak at 25
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, which was more than the number of suits and dresses, which were approximately 19
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 and 15
million
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 respectively.
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Ensure accuracy in details; the example regarding coat production surpassing dress production could be clarified.
coherence cohesion
Include an explicit conclusion summarizing the main trends to enhance the essay completeness.
task achievement
The essay effectively describes the overall trends and differences in production amounts.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the essay, with an introduction, clear differentiation of periods, and a final paragraph describing overall outcomes, provides logical clarity.

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