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The computers are widely used in education and some people think that teachers do not play an important role in the classroom. To what extent do you agree

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The usage of technology
such
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 as computers is becoming normal in the world of education to the point where people argue that
teachers
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'
role
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 is not necessary in the
classroom
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. I strongly disagree that
teachers
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 do not play a significant
role
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 in the learning process because they act as the supervisor in the class to keep track of the
students
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 and they provide guidance. The
role
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 of
teacher
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teachers
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 is not only limited to teaching particular subjects, they are
also
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 responsible
of
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 managing the
classroom
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 to create a
convinient environtment
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convenient environment
 for
students
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 to study.
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,
teachers
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 can assess each
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students
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 capability based on their emotional aspects and give them personal feedback when needed which cannot be done by a computer. Kindergarten is
the
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 prime example of the importance of
teachers
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. Without them, kids at
their
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 early age do not have any supervisors during classes.
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,
teachers
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' presence is essential and
irreplacable
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irreplaceable
 as they take care of their
students
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at
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 the
classroom
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.
In addition
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, in order to learn how to operate technological devices, some
students
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 still need guidance since not everyone can teach themselves, especially younger
students
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.
For example
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,
students
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 in Indonesia are encouraged to develop basic computerization skills since primary school and during
this
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 activity, a teacher is present to introduce and assist them to learn how to use a computer properly.
As a result
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, the
role
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 of a teacher is important to give assistance to the
students
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. In conclusion,
although
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 computers may seem to replace the
role
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 of
teachers
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, I believe that
teachers
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 offer more in terms of succeeding the education because they are capable
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 things that computers cannot,
such
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 as being the
classroom
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 supervisor and the
students
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' helper.

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Explain in detail how teachers manage the classroom environment to enhance learning, providing specific methods or scenarios.
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Provide a more balanced discussion by acknowledging the possible benefits of computer usage in education, even if you ultimately disagree with replacing teachers.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly links back to the main argument, reinforcing your position with varied expression.
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The essay clearly disagrees with the statement, maintaining a strong stance throughout, which allows for focused arguments.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both well-structured, effectively outlining and summarizing the main argument.
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The use of specific examples such as the situation in Indonesia provides concrete support to your arguments, making them more relatable and realistic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Self-paced learning
  • Personalized education
  • Student-centered learning
  • Interactive tools
  • Blended learning
  • Facilitator
  • Critical thinking
  • Soft skills
  • Empathy
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Mentorship
  • Teacher-student relationship
  • Practical experience
  • Real-world insights
  • Standardization of education
  • Individual student needs
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