The map below describes changes to a park in 1980 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below describes changes to a park in 1980 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
two
maps compare the changes in the layout of a park in 1980 and today. In overview, much entertainment has been added to the park, and flower fields have
also
been removed at present. In 1980, there were trees that took up the upper right corner of the land, and
next,
there were a large number of
flowers
below the wood. Concerning the left side, a pond and three benches around, plus a small area to the south of the pond was used for planting
flowers
.
Additionally
, there were
two
gates, one was situated between
two
fields of
flowers
, and another was erected on the left side and beyond the water. Nowadays, the landscape of the green space has been reshaped.
First,
Two
doors were dismantled, and
flowers
were replaced by the bush in the lower left corner
as well as
the playground in the lower right corner.
Moreover
, the land of the original grove on the right side has been shrunk, and some parts were repurposed as a picnic place.
Therefore
, there are chairs, and desks for the public to come to the barbecue.
Finally
, one more chair was placed around the pond.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, flowers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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