Some university students want to learn about other subject in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.
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getting
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for university students
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while
others believe focus
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focusing
subject
bring
more advantages for Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
students
. In my opinion, I believe that learning a minor subject
open
more opportunities to discover knowledge and skills.
On one hand, it can be argued that Wrong verb form
opens
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having
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an
subject
incorporate
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incorporated
students
major Change noun form
students'
student's
subject
may consuming
their Change the verb form
consume
be consuming
time
and become unproductive. Moreover
, they prefer to spend their time
concentrate
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concentrating
to learn
their main major, Change preposition
on learning
in
addition
they believe having a priority Add a comma
addition,
subject
, which help
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helps
themselves
to be a master and expert Correct pronoun usage
them
for
their major in the future. Change preposition
in
For example
, the average master
degree Change noun form
master's
study
in Europe, Replace the word
student
such
as Correct article usage
the Netherland
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Netherlands
held
a Wrong verb form
holds
master
degree for one year only, and Change noun form
master's
suggest
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suggests
students
to
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increased
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increase
students
knowledged
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knowledge
for
their Change preposition
of
subject
.
On the other hand
, in contrast
, students
believe that attending others
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other
subject
with their crucial Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
subject
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ignite
students
passion for new skills and knowledge. While
learing
new minor Correct your spelling
learning
subject
consumed their Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
time
, they gainned
new Correct your spelling
gained
skillis
that they never Correct your spelling
skills
skill is
discover
before Wrong verb form
discovered
from
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apply
themselves
, which they would Correct pronoun usage
apply
used
for their career when they Change the verb form
use
grow
up. Wrong verb form
grew
Although
people think learning skils
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skills
such
as cooking, baking, and hospitality such
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apply
an
essential abilities, Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
but
in Remove the conjunction
apply
real life
practice Add a hyphen
real-life
it
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is
such
a crutial
part of our life. Correct your spelling
crucial
critical
For instance
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the Autralia
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the Autralia
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Australian
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government Correct your spelling
Australian
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offers
offering
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offers
thus
the majority Change preposition
of work
work
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of work
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choices
choises
it is Correct your spelling
choices
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related
realated
to Correct your spelling
related
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hospitality
hospilitality
, cooking, and Correct your spelling
hospitality
labor
.
In conclusion, Change the spelling
labour
while
people believe study new subjects, Correct pronoun usage
they cosumed
cosumed
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consume
students
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students'
student's
time
and do not have result
for themselves. I believe Fix the agreement mistake
results
have
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having
extra
focus Add an article
an extra
the extra
for
new subjects Change preposition
on
encouraged
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encourages
students
to gain skills which is
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are
usefull
in Correct your spelling
useful
thr
future.Correct your spelling
the
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Grammar
Improve grammatical accuracy; there are several grammatical errors that affect clarity.
Task Response
Provide more specific examples to strengthen arguments and demonstrate deeper understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance coherence by using more transitional words and phrases to improve the flow of ideas.
Introduction
Clearly stated opinion in the introduction, setting the stage for the essay.
Task Response
Balanced discussion of both viewpoints, showing awareness of differing perspectives.
Coherence and Cohesion
Presence of an introduction and a conclusion to frame the essay.