Some university students want to learn about other subject in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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Grammar

Improve grammatical accuracy; there are several grammatical errors that affect clarity.

Task Response

Provide more specific examples to strengthen arguments and demonstrate deeper understanding.

Coherence and Cohesion

Enhance coherence by using more transitional words and phrases to improve the flow of ideas.

Introduction

Clearly stated opinion in the introduction, setting the stage for the essay.

Task Response

Balanced discussion of both viewpoints, showing awareness of differing perspectives.

Coherence and Cohesion

Presence of an introduction and a conclusion to frame the essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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