Some university students want to learn about other subject in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

There have been conflicting views on
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extra
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for university
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beneficial,
while
others believe
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on the main
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more advantages for
students
. In my opinion, I believe that learning a minor
subject
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more opportunities to discover knowledge and skills. On one hand, it can be argued that
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extra
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with university
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may
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their
time
and become unproductive.
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, they prefer to spend their
time
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to learn
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on learning
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their main major,
in
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they believe having a priority
subject
, which
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themselves
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to be a master and expert
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their major in the future.
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, the average
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degree
study
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in Europe,
such
as
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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held
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a
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degree for one year only, and
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students
to
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focus on their major to
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students
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for
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their
subject
.
On the other hand
,
in contrast
,
students
believe that attending
others
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minor
subject
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with their crucial
subject
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ignite
students
passion for new skills and knowledge.
While
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learning
new minor
subject
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consumed their
time
, they
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gained
new
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skills
skill is
that they never
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before
from
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themselves
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, which they would
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for their career when they
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up.
Although
people think learning
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skills
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such
as cooking, baking, and hospitality
such
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an
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essential abilities,
but
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in
real life
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practice
it
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is
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such
a
crutial
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crucial
critical
part of our life.
For instance
,
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the Autralia
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the Autralia
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Australian
Autralia
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Australian
government
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offering
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WHV (Working Holiday Visa) for foreigners who would like to experience working abroad,
thus
the majority
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work
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choices
choises
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it is
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related
realated
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related
to
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hospitality
hospilitality
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hospitality
, cooking, and
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. In conclusion,
while
people believe study new subjects,
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cosumed
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consume
students
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time
and do not have
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results
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for themselves. I believe
have
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having
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extra
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focus
for
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on
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new subjects
encouraged
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students
to gain skills which
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are
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usefull
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useful
in
thr
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the
future.
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Introduction
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Task Response
Balanced discussion of both viewpoints, showing awareness of differing perspectives.
Coherence and Cohesion
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