Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion?
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task achievement
Clarify your opinion more distinctly in the introduction, and ensure it ties together at the conclusion.
task achievement
You should aim to present clear, specific examples to support your points. Instead of just stating that there's excessive electrical consumption, discuss specific impacts or case studies for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your essay would benefit from a more logical sequence. Make sure each paragraph connects more seamlessly to the next, creating a natural argument progression.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your main points under clearly defined sections, possibly with subpoints, to enhance overall flow.
coherence cohesion
Be cautious of sentence structure and grammar inaccuracies to enhance understanding and coherence. Proofreading could help identify these issues.
task achievement
You have a clear awareness of the topic's complexity and present both sides of the argument, which is commendable.
task achievement
You've managed to maintain a balanced perspective by discussing both harmful and potentially beneficial aspects of human activities.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present and offer a general framework for the essay, which helps structure your points.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example