The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the "Minfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over

between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the "Minfeatures,

and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The
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illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 years and over in three countries namely
USA
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the USA
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, Sweden, and Japan from 1940 to 2040.
Overall
it can be seen that all three countries witnessed a significant increase during
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period of
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the year
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.
To begin
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between 1940 and 1960 both USA and Sweden saw a similar trend until
in
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2000 which saw the same percentage of
population
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the population
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which was around 15%
then
Sweden had a slight decline around 16% and
then
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until
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reached
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a peak
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23% ,
while
USA
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the USA
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kept increased in 2020 around 20% and
then
saw a slight decline around 18% in 2023 followed with a significant increased in 2040 approximately 25%.
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the other hand, Japan
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the lowest number of people which stood at 5% in 1940 after that it
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dropped
dim the following four years the most interesting point
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in 2023
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a dramatic
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to reach a peak at 29%.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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