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Some people believe that politicians have the greatest influences on the world, but other people believe that the scientist have the greatest influences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals
contendt
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contend
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contends
 that
politicians
 hold the ultimate power in the world,
while
 others think that scientists hold the greatest sway.
This
 topic is quite controversial among citizens, as both sides have anti-movements that are protesting against each other daily
due to
 not agreeing with each other based on their views.
The scientists
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Scientists
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 always tell you what is
reality
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the reality
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 of a situation is,
while
politicians
 will tell
what
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you what
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 the majority of the
people
 want to hear. The reality is not cruel all the time, but
people
 usually get frightened when they get hit by the honest truth, that the
politicians
 tried to conceal.
Scientist
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Scientists
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 are one of the rarest and smartest
people
 on the planet with the highest level of IQ that considerably "normal"
people
 cannot comprehend.
Therefore
 a lot of time scientists
are not understand
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 by society,and that's why
politicians
 have more influence in our world. A certain individual can only have power if
people
 believe in them, so that's why
politicians
 are so persuasive and believable because they only tell us what we want to hear, not what is the reality. They make rules that
favor
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 them and rules that will win
people
 over. That's why
politicians
 have the greatest influence in the world
because
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they can decode the scientific facts that we can understand and win us over. In my opinion, we need
people
 who can control us and our country, so that we
wont
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won't
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 turn against each other.
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Ensure that each argument is well-supported with specific examples or evidence. This will strengthen your points and make your argument more persuasive.
structure
Improve coherence by ensuring each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.
conclusion
Provide a clearer conclusion that summarizes the main points and firmly states your opinion on the matter.
introduction
The introduction effectively presents the topic and indicates the scope of discussion, setting up the essay well.
content
There is a clear attempt to discuss both sides of the argument which is essential for this topic type.
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The essay acknowledges the complexity of the issue, emphasizing the importance of understanding different perspectives.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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