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The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given
process
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 how soft
cheese
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 was
producted
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produced
.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there are five main steps in the
process
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 of making soft
cheese
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, starting with mixing two
liquid
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liquids
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 including
water
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 and milk and ending with the cooling step. First of all, the first stage in the
process
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 of making soft
chesse
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cheese
 is the adding and mixing of
water
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 and milk.
Next,
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it
is spent
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takes
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 two hours
with
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at
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the
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a
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 temperature
about
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of about
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 5
dergee
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degree
degrees
Celsius
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 to cool
this
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 liquid which is
the
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a
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combine
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combination
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 of
water
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 and milk. When
this
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 mixture is completed, the workers will add some salt before
move
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moving
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 to the next step in the
process
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 of soft
cheese
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 production . The next stage is the fermentation. It takes two hours at a temperature of 35 degrees
Celsius
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 to make the liquid thicker. The following
steps
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step
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 is
the
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apply
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evaporation. In
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this
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these
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 steps the temperature
reach
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reached
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 the highest
about
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at about
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 100
dergee
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degree
degrees
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celsius
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Celsius
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 and
was spent
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lasted
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 eight hours.
Finally
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, in the
last
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 stage, the mixture experiences an 8-hour cooling
process
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 at 5 degrees
Celsius
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, it
is became
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becomes
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thickest
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the thickest
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 as
know
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known
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 as soft
cheese
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 and will be taken by the filter on the top.
Whereas
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, the
waste
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wastewater
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water
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 will move out by the bottom filter.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, cheese, water, celsius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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