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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee ans bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European counties.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee ans bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European counties.
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The tables provide data on the
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 in five European countries in 1999 and 2004, measured in millions of
euros
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
sales
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 of both
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 increased over the period, with some countries showing more significant growth than others. Switzerland had the highest
sales
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 of
bananas
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 in both years,
while
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 the
UK
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 experienced the largest increase in
coffee
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sales
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. In terms of
coffee
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sales
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, the
UK
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 saw a dramatic rise from 1.5
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to 20
million
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euros
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 in 2004, representing the most substantial growth.
Similarly
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, Switzerland’s
coffee
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sales
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 doubled, from 3
million
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euros
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 to 6
million
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euros
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. Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden
also
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 saw slight increases in
coffee
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sales
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, with Belgium’s
sales
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 rising from 1
million
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euros
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 to 1.7
million
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euros
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. For
bananas
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, Switzerland maintained the highest
sales
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, which increased from 15
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to 47
million
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euros
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 in 2004. The
UK
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 saw a significant rise as well, from 1
million
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euros
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 to 5.5
million
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euros
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.
In contrast
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, Sweden and Denmark both experienced declines in banana
sales
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, with Denmark’s
sales
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 dropping from 2
million
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euros
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 to 0.9
million
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euros
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. In summary, Fairtrade
coffee
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 and banana
sales
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 saw notable growth in the
UK
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 and Switzerland,
while
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 Sweden and Denmark had more modest changes, particularly for
bananas
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, euros, uk, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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