In many different countries, shops and products are the same. Some people think ıt is a positive development, while others believe it is a negative development. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Nowadays most
shops
and
products
are available
almost
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in almost
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every country in the world
due to
globalization. Some individuals consider that it is a pragmatic evolution,
while
other
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others
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say it is a negative expansion.
Although
I am aware of the disadvantages of
this
situation I defend it as a positive development. The similarities between
products
and
shops
are becoming a risk for traditional items. It is always easy to reach them and
also
they are popular. Because of these
products
and
shop
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shops
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, the traditional ones are about to disappear
due to
the price disadvantage compared to these ones.
For example
, because of the global
coffee
shops
like Starbucks most of the Turkish
coffee
shops
were closed and
also
the number of people who drink Turkish
coffee
is decreasing day by day. It seems that globalization will soon cause Turkish
coffee
to disappear.
On the other hand
, Every country does not have the same technology so some
products
can be produced by a country more cheaper than others or some kinds of
products
can be produced by only a few countries. In
this
situation
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people are able to buy things cheaper than normally they can not afford.
For instance
, electric cars are getting more affordable after they started to produce
by
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China and China is the only one where chips can be produced for cars. In conclusion,
Although
there are some negative effects of globalization on
products
and
shops
its positive effects are more than its harm and I believe it is a totally positive development.
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task achievement
Try to elaborate further on both perspectives of the argument with more detailed examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance the overall flow of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, adding to the overall coherence.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples, such as the impact of global coffee shops and electric cars, which help support your argument.
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