In many different countries, shops and products are the same. Some people think ıt is a positive development, while others believe it is a negative development. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
Nowadays most
shops
and products
are available almost
every country in the world Change preposition
in almost
due to
globalization. Some individuals consider that it is a pragmatic evolution, while
other
say it is a negative expansion. Fix the agreement mistake
others
Although
I am aware of the disadvantages of this
situation I defend it as a positive development.
The similarities between products
and shops
are becoming a risk for traditional items. It is always easy to reach them and also
they are popular. Because of these products
and shop
, the traditional ones are about to disappear Fix the agreement mistake
shops
due to
the price disadvantage compared to these ones. For example
, because of the global coffee
shops
like Starbucks most of the Turkish coffee
shops
were closed and also
the number of people who drink Turkish coffee
is decreasing day by day. It seems that globalization will soon cause Turkish coffee
to disappear.
On the other hand
, Every country does not have the same technology so some products
can be produced by a country more cheaper than others or some kinds of products
can be produced by only a few countries. In this
situation
people are able to buy things cheaper than normally they can not afford. Add a comma
situation,
For instance
, electric cars are getting more affordable after they started to produce by
China and China is the only one where chips can be produced for cars.
In conclusion, Change preposition
in
Although
there are some negative effects of globalization on products
and shops
its positive effects are more than its harm and I believe it is a totally positive development.Submitted by e.yildizhundur on
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task achievement
Try to elaborate further on both perspectives of the argument with more detailed examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance the overall flow of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, adding to the overall coherence.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples, such as the impact of global coffee shops and electric cars, which help support your argument.