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The charts below show the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The above table chart demonstrates the number of US family by their annual
income
Use synonyms
 in three different periods 2007, 2011 and 2015  It is noticeable that the highest percentage was related to people with
Use synonyms
income
Correct article usage
an income
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100,000
Change preposition
of 100,000
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 or more in 2015.
While
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 the salary between 75,000 to 99,000 received the
weakest
Correct word choice
lowest
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 percentage in the three years. It is evident that
number
Change the article
a number
the number
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 of individuals with
Use synonyms
income
Correct article usage
an income
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 less than 25,000
shows
Wrong verb form
showed
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 dramatic growth from 25 to approximately 30 in 2011.
In contrast
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, the 50-74 remained stable in 2007,2011 and 2015 at 20.
In addition
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, the number of people with 25 to 49
income
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 show significant rais in 2011 within 30. Apparently, the percentage of individuals with 100,00 or more salary started to increase gradually to reach the peak point in 2015 at 34.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • household income
  • economic fluctuations
  • income brackets
  • economic downturns
  • economic growth
  • global financial crisis
  • recovery
  • middle-income bracket
  • trends
  • proportion
  • stability
  • stagnation
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