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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart depicts the global
water
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use
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 in Km3 metric and three categories over the years from 1900 to 2000. The table illustrates the consumption of
water
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 in
Brazil
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 and
Congo
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 and
made
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makes
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 some comparisons in population, irrigated land in km2 and
water
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use
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 per person in m3 metric.
Overall
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,
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water
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the water
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use
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 trend has
been
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increased steadily over these years with a higher acceleration from 1950 to 1960.
The
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apply
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Domestic
use
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 has the lowest volume.
On the other hand
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, agricultural uses have the highest volume of 3000 Km3 and it started from 500 Km3 in 1900. Industrial and domestic
consumptions
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consumption
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 were roughly constant over the years 1900 to 1950.
Brazil
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 has
the
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a
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 population of 176 million
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that
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which
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 is approximately 35 times higher
that
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than
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Congo
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 with 5.2 million people.
However
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, the
water
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 consumption per person in
Brazil
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 is much higher
that
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than
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Congo
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in Congo
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. The irrigated land in
Brazil
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 is 26500 Km2
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that
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which
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 is larger than
Democratic
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the Democratic
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 Republic of
Congo
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, km, brazil, congo with synonyms.
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