The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time.
The bar chart illustrates the
number
of people, divided by gender, who
pursue
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full-time and part-time
education
in Britain from 1970 to 1990.
Overall
, the
number
of men and women who had full-time
education
was notably higher than part-time during the period given. There were 1000 male
students
who enrolled in full-time
education
in 1970. During the next 20 years,
this
number
had
an
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a
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downward trend but it still allocated for more than 800
students
.
In contrast
, there were only one out of ten male
students
who signed up for part-time
education
. It increased slightly to around 180
students
in 1980 and ended with just above 200
students
. The
number
of female
students
studying full-time
had
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has
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a
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apply
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gradual increase
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over the years. It started with around 750
student
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students
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, grew to around 800
students
and reached its peak with 1100
students
. Part-time female
students
also
had an upward trend. In 1970, less than 100 female
students
chose part-time
education
.
This
number
rose for the next two decades allocating
for
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apply
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around 200
students
in both
period
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periods
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, education, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • further education
  • full-time study
  • part-time study
  • trend
  • overall number
  • time period
  • gender differences
  • increase
  • decrease
  • analyze
  • evaluate
  • societal changes
  • economic factors
  • educational policies
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