Many people think that increasing business and cultural contacts between countries is a positive development. However, others believe that these are leading to the loss of national identities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Many people believe that
business
and cultural contacts between
countries
is
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positive,
while
others believe that
countries
loss
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lose
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their national identities because of
globalization
. I personally believe that
while
cultural and
business
contacts between
countries
do not let
countries
celebrating
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their
traditions
, it is a positive development because
countries
can protect each
in
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others'
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traditions
and culture. Exchanging
cultures
and
business
between
countries
helps to protect
countries
. Exchanging cultural norms and
business
between
countries
called
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globalization
, and
globalization
makes a strong bond between
countries
.
Globalization
helps one country to come forward to protect the
cultures
of different
countries
.
For example
, the USA and Canada
has
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signed a treaty of sharing their
cultures
and
business
, and that
also
helps to share their
cultures
and
traditions
.
Therefore
, I personally believe that sharing
cultures
and
business
between
countries
helps to protect
cultures
.
On the contrary
, sharing culture and
business
between
countries
restrict
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preserving their own
cultures
and
business
. If
countries
focus on
globalization
, they will not become interested in preserving their
cultures
. They forget to practice their cultural norms and
traditions
.
For example
, after exchanging
cultures
and
business
between India and Nepal, the young generations of
two
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the two
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countries
do
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not interested in preserving their own
cultures
.
However
, I personally believe exchanging
cultures
and
business
is more appropriate in today's era than following national
traditions
and
cultures
. In conclusion, sharing
business
and
cultures
between
countries
helps to protect
countries
.
However
, it restricts
practicing
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national
cultures
and
traditions
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • economic growth
  • living standards
  • cultural understanding
  • homogenization
  • national identities
  • preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • balancing
  • embrace
  • opportunities
  • respecting
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