The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar graph illustrates the information on the rates of Canadians
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money to charitable organisations in be
age
range for the years 2000 and 2015. The proportion is in the percentage.
overall
, the
age
range that leads
above all
was 35 to 49 and the lowest was 18 to 24.
Whereas
, the remaining lies between them.
Firstly
in 2000, there was an upgrade
showed
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in the initial
age
groups which are 18 to 24, 25 to 34 and 35 to 49 by approximately 20%, 28% and 38% respectively.
While
, in the range of 50 to 64 and 65 above the percentage drops and ended by around 34% for the former and 31% for the latter.
On the contrary
, in 2015
also
growth was shown in the initial four
age
groups by nearly 11%, 25%, 34%, and 37%.
However
, in the
last
group
also
there was a decrement shown by 34%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age range
  • charitable organisations
  • fluctuates
  • notable changes
  • participation
  • considerable decrease
  • contrast
  • consistent increase
  • middle age groups
  • peak
  • notable drop
  • shift
  • financial priorities
  • economic circumstances
  • demographic
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