A lot of places on the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweighs its drawback?
Tourism
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have
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jewel of some areas in the world, yet there are problems relating to Correct word choice
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tourism
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tourism
and at the same time will weigh its risks and benefits.
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hand, one of the benefits of Correct article usage
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tourism
people
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, residents of the locality will have employment opportunities. Linking Words
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people
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system
. The developments are brought by Fix the agreement mistake
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interests
of big companies to invest and earn profit. Correct article usage
the interests
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destination in the Philippines which is Boracay Island has continually Correct your spelling
tourist
provide
employment for local Change the verb form
provided
people
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such
as tourist guides, service crews and businesses.
On another hand, one of the Linking Words
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disadvantage
disadvantages
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tourism
environmental
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an environmental
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people
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, other entrepreneurs cut trees for construction in order to build hotels, airports, and bus terminals. Linking Words
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Palawan
their forests are under threat for illegal logging, which is used for building resorts. Add a comma
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disposal
disposals
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dispose
it.
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tourism
are heavier compared to its cons. Use synonyms
Although
, the drawbacks can potentially harm the Linking Words
people
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yet
there are regulations the governing body can implement to combat these problems.
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tourism
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such
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increase
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an increase
of
labour demand and Change preposition
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improvement
of the tourist location. Correct article usage
an improvement
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, there are negative impacts Linking Words
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hazard
and safety concerns. I still strongly believe that the shortcomings can be overcome by implementing laws.Fix the agreement mistake
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language
Ensure consistency in grammar and spelling to improve clarity. For example, 'tourism have' should be 'tourism has' and 'disadavantage' should be 'disadvantage'.
task achievement
Expand on some examples to show a deeper understanding of the topic. For instance, explaining more about how Boracay's developments specifically impact the local economy could strengthen your task response.
task achievement
Provide more detailed comparisons to the drawbacks of tourism to show a more balanced argument.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion effectively framing the essay.
task achievement
Good use of specific examples like Boracay Island and Palawan to illustrate points.
coherence cohesion
Structured paragraphs that discuss both advantages and disadvantages clearly.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
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