In many societies, there is a growing emphasis on sustainable living and reducing environmental impact. What are the challenges of adopting a sustainable lifestyle? What practical actions can individuals take to contribute to sustainability?

In recent years the world has suffered from climate change,
thus
humanity focusing on finding new ways to start eco-friendly lifestyles and decrease the negative effects on the environment.
This
essay is going to provide the main issues for adopting and some developments to solve
this
problem. The most compelling obstacle is the high payment for adjustment. Since plastic
stuffs
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are
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way
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cheaper than
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products.
Therefore
, average citizens are not able to afford
such
environmentally friendly items.
In addition
, the convenience of synthetic material products becomes irreplaceable in comparison to other things that are made of green fabric.
As a result
, individuals need to think twice before buying
such
sustainable stuff,
hence
plastic turns into ordinary items in our daily lives.
For example
, in supermarkets, there are plenty of bags near the box office which are made of cloth.
However
, almost nobody purchases those things, since the cost for them is too high.
Nevertheless
, there is an action that can be taken as a solution to
this
problem. To tackle
such
issues, residents should recycle all the things that they consume, not only
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items but
also
others
such
as glass or unsorted waste.
Moreover
, they need to wash them before throwing them into special trashcans.
Subsequently
, it would be much easier to sort and recycle them into new useful equipment.
For example
, in Korea, people are used to washing garbage and collecting them in large amounts.
As a result
, the Korean Republic became one of the most clean countries in the world. In conclusion, by summing up these provided examples and explanations it becomes clear, that one of the challenges to adopting sustainable living is
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worth
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it.
However
, some developments could lead to a decision for
this
problem.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to maintain consistency in terminology; for instance, you use 'plastic stuffs' and 'synthetic material products,' which could be refined to 'plastic products.' This will help in maintaining clarity throughout your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
While the structure of your essay is generally clear, ensure all paragraphs are explicitly linked. Use linking phrases to create strong connections between ideas and paragraphs for better cohesion.
Task Achievement
Ensure all examples are clearly relevant and well-integrated into your argument. While your examples are generally relevant, make sure they are clearly connected to your main points to effectively support your argument.
Task Achievement
Clarify and elaborate on some of your points, like 'green-labeled products' and 'eco-friendly lifestyles,' to ensure the reader fully understands your ideas and arguments without assumptions.
Task Achievement
Your essay provides specific examples, such as the case of Korea, which effectively illustrate your points and strengthen your arguments about sustainability.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively outline and wrap up your main points, showing good structure and coherence in your essay.
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