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Some people think that single-sex schools are the best for students, while others believe that coeducational schools are better. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people assert that
students
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 in single-sex
schools
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have better
 academic achievements,
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 many others argue that mixed
schools
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 offer
students
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 better social skills for their future. Personally, I am in favour of the latter view.  To start with,
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 studying at mixed
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 have more chances to communicate with members of the opposite sex.
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, children learn how to talk to the other
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 at an early age;
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, their social skills would certainly be fostered.
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, mixed
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 give
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 opportunities to deal with conflicts with the other
gender
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, which strengthens
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’ problem-solving skills.
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, when a boy has a conflict with a girl at
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, both of them must learn how to cope.
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 lesson must be learned sooner or later;
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,
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 benefit more if they can learn it sooner.  Admittedly, single-sex
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 have fewer distractions. The reason for
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 is if a
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 only has boys or girls,
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 would not be distracted by members of the opposite sex at
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;
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, they can focus on their learning. Even so, these
students
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 still have access to the other
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 after
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, which means in reality, they must meet the other
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 anyway.
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, the benefits of single-sex
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 are quite limited. In summary, I would concede that single-sex
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 have some advantages. Despite that
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 mixed
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 certainly support
students
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 in a much better way.
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, I am convinced that
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 should go to mixed
schools
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.
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Task Response
Ensure to provide a more balanced argument by expanding more on the benefits of single-sex schools, as you mostly focus on coeducational environments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using clearer linking words or phrases to improve the flow between ideas and paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, and your viewpoint was evident throughout the essay.
Task Response
Your essay addresses the task by discussing both views and providing your opinion.
Task Response
You used specific examples effectively to support your main points, such as the impact of mixed schools on social skills.

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