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Some people think that single-sex schools are the best for students, while others believe that coeducational schools are better. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people assert that
students
 in single-sex
schools
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have better
 academic achievements,
whereas
 many others argue that mixed
schools
 offer
students
 better social skills for their future. Personally, I am in favour of the latter view.  To start with,
students
 studying at mixed
schools
 have more chances to communicate with members of the opposite sex.
In other words
, children learn how to talk to the other
gender
 at an early age;
therefore
, their social skills would certainly be fostered.
Moreover
, mixed
schools
 give
students
 opportunities to deal with conflicts with the other
gender
, which strengthens
students
’ problem-solving skills.
For instance
, when a boy has a conflict with a girl at
school
, both of them must learn how to cope.
This
 lesson must be learned sooner or later;
as a result
,
students
 benefit more if they can learn it sooner.  Admittedly, single-sex
schools
 have fewer distractions. The reason for
this
 is if a
school
 only has boys or girls,
students
 would not be distracted by members of the opposite sex at
school
;
hence
, they can focus on their learning. Even so, these
students
 still have access to the other
gender
 after
school
, which means in reality, they must meet the other
gender
 anyway.
Consequently
, the benefits of single-sex
schools
 are quite limited. In summary, I would concede that single-sex
schools
 have some advantages. Despite that
,
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 mixed
schools
 certainly support
students
 in a much better way.
Overall
, I am convinced that
students
 should go to mixed
schools
.
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Task Response
Ensure to provide a more balanced argument by expanding more on the benefits of single-sex schools, as you mostly focus on coeducational environments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using clearer linking words or phrases to improve the flow between ideas and paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, and your viewpoint was evident throughout the essay.
Task Response
Your essay addresses the task by discussing both views and providing your opinion.
Task Response
You used specific examples effectively to support your main points, such as the impact of mixed schools on social skills.

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