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The chart belo gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by American by age range in 2013. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar chart illustrates the information about the ratio of salaries and their
spendings
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spending
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 by different
age
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ages
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 of people
of
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 America in 2023.
Overall
, it gives us
the
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a
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 description of
loss
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the loss
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 and profit of Americans. The highest income, around $80000, was occupied by the individuals,
who's
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whose
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age
 was between 35-44 and 45-54.
However
, their spendings were
reletivaly
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relatively
 low($60000), as compared to other
age
 groups.
Furthermore
, people who were in their 25 and 75 years, have almost equal
spendings
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spending
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 and pay. One
earn
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 less than $30000 but spends more
then
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 it,
whereas
 the other group have an equal
ration
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ratio
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 of $30000.
Additionally
,
upto
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up to
 $60000 income and near to %50000 expenses, were followed by the
age
 group of 25-34. The residents who were between 45-54, have more income
then
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than
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 their expenses, as per
report
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 of 2023. In conclusion, the groups who
spends
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spend
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 less and
earns
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earn
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 more were in profit,
where as
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whereas
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 others were in loss.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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