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The diagrams below show UK students’ responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised.

The diagrams below show UK students’ responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised.
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The data below provides information on how
students
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 in the UK respond to the question of to what extent they would describe themselves as organised when it comes to managing finances.
Overall
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,
students
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 are fairly organised and the proportion of
students
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 very organised is older in terms of age when it comes to finance management. The pie chart demonstrates that the majority of
students
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 are fairly organised in managing their money, making up 55% of the total.
Moreover
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, the proportion of pupils in the not very organised or very organised category are similar, with a 1% difference between the two categories.
In contrast
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, very few scholars are not at all organised at only 4% as shown in the chart. The table chart provides evidence that only 21% of
students
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 are very organised.
It is clear that
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 learners older in age, representing 49%, are more organised in comparison to
students
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 aged up to 22 years, making up one-fourth of the total.
In addition
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, the difference in organisation skills between 22-year-olds and 23 to 25-year-olds
are
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 not drastic, with a 1% difference.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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