You are moving to a new city for work and have just realized that an old friend lives in the city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Ask them for advice in finding accommodation • Tell them where you would like to live • Tell them the type of place you are looking for
Dear Sam,
I hope
this
letter finds you and your family well. I am glad to know that you are living in the same city where I am planning to move for employment purpose
. I am writing Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
this
letter to you to seek your support for
finding a suitable Change preposition
in
accomodation
for me.
As you are familiar with each and everything of Correct your spelling
accommodation
this
city. That is
why I think you are the perfect person for giving
me advice on choosing a better Change preposition
to give
place
to live. I know very well, you
have a hectic schedule because of Correct word choice
that you
lot
of Change the article
a lot
work related
responsibilities. As you told me in your Add a hyphen
work-related
last
message, they hired you
HR manager. So, you will get hardly enough time for me but your advice proves Correct pronoun usage
your
boon
to me.
I want to live in a peaceful and Correct article usage
a boon
quiter
area where I can easily Correct your spelling
quieter
quiet
quite
focused
and concentrate on my work. Change the verb form
focus
Also
, it would be free from the hustle and bustle from
the city. It would be great if you find a Change preposition
of
place
nearby
any park because I am in Correct your spelling
near
habit
of doing Yoga and exercise on Correct article usage
the habit
daily
basis. By doing Correct article usage
a daily
this
, I would be able to meet my new neighbours and able to create a better understanding as well. This
place
should be close to bus stations, grocery
and clothing stores to save time from commuting Correct word choice
and grocery
one
Change preposition
from one
place
to another.
I am looking for a single room basement which I think best option for me in case of privacy. By doing
your research to make Change preposition
Doing
your
sure that it Correct pronoun usage
apply
should
be available at Verb problem
apply
reasonable
price by including all Add an article
a reasonable
basic
Correct article usage
the basic
amenties
in it. One thing I want to remind you Correct your spelling
amenities
that
I have my own car. So, please ensure that Add a missing verb
is that
partcular
house has their own parking area to park my car. I would like to thank you in advance for being Correct your spelling
particular
such
an amazing friend. You are the best!
I look forward to hear
back from you soon!
Warm Regards,
Jazz.Change the verb form
hearing
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coherence cohesion
While the letter is very well-written, consider breaking down lengthy sentences for better clarity. For example, the sentence in the second paragraph could be split into two for improved readability.
coherence cohesion
When describing the type of accommodation you need, try to be slightly more concise to make sure each paragraph conveys a single central idea.
task achievement
Your letter effectively covers all three prompts: asking for advice, expressing location preferences, and detailing the type of accommodation.
task achievement
The letter has a friendly and polite tone suitable for a letter to an old friend. This makes it engaging and pleasant to read.
coherence cohesion
The logical flow of the letter is very good; you structured it well with clear paragraphs that each focus on a different aspect of your move.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing in your letter are warm and appropriate, which strengthens the overall structure and tone.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.