The diagram below shows the life cycle of salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. aa
The picture represents information about salmon’s lifecycle.
Cycle
starts with spawning Add an article
The cycle
eggs
to
fresh water and it continues with growing Change preposition
in
up
processes until Change preposition
apply
giving
new lives, Verb problem
apply
eggs
. It repeats over and over again.
Eggs
in fresh water hatch after 3 months and become alevin which have
Change the verb form
has
appearance
like a fish. until learning swimming they feed Add an article
an appearance
of
yolk-sac. 5-10 weeks old salmons which can swim grow up to parrs with finger markings.
Salmons that are 1-3 years old will start to group with others and head out to sea, they become bigger than it was at the beginning. Change preposition
off
After
this
period adult fishes spent 1-8 years at sea and later spawning adult salmons changes
their features, spawn Correct subject-verb agreement
change
eggs
and die within two weeks.Submitted by akzharkynzhamal on
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