The diagram below shows the life cycle of salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. aa

The diagram below shows the life cycle of salmon. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. aa
The picture represents information about salmon’s lifecycle.
Cycle
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The cycle
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starts with spawning
eggs
to
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fresh water and it continues with growing
up
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processes until
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new lives,
eggs
. It repeats over and over again.
Eggs
in fresh water hatch after 3 months and become alevin which
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appearance
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an appearance
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like a fish. until learning swimming they feed
of
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yolk-sac. 5-10 weeks old salmons which can swim grow up to parrs with finger markings. Salmons that are 1-3 years old will start to group with others and head out to sea, they become bigger than it was at the beginning.
After
this
period adult fishes spent 1-8 years at sea and later spawning adult salmons
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their features, spawn
eggs
and die within two weeks.
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