The diagram below shows the life cycle of salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. as

The diagram below shows the life cycle of salmon. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. as
The picture depicts
lifespan
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the lifespan
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of fish. There are seven main stages of
cycle
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the cycle
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of salmon’s life. Beginning with eggs in fresh water and ending with spawning adult salmon. There is a period of fish’s life.
According to
the diagram it
is begin
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with seven eggs which hatched in about three months. Following alevin that feeds off yolk-sae for some weeks. After that fry which is five to ten weeks older and it can almost swim. The next stage is parr which is several months older than fry and develops “finger” markings gradually. There is
smolt
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a smolt
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which is one to three years older than previous ones and can head out to sea with
group
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the group
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.
Next
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The next
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one is about adult fish
that is
fully developed and spends one to eight years at sea.
Afterwards
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it
is
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spawns
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spawning adult which spawns and dies meanwhile two weeks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cycle
  • diagram
  • life cycle
  • main features
  • overview
  • stage
  • salmon
  • comparison
  • differences
  • significant
  • summarize
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