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Writing Task 1 The graph shows the proportion of energy that was produced from coal in four European countries from 1995 to 2010. You should write at least 150 words

Writing Task 1 The graph shows the proportion of energy that was produced from coal in four European countries from 1995 to 2010. You should write at least 150 words
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The figure gives information about the proportion of
energy
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 that was produced from coal in European countries.
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, the graph indicates a clear trend of decreasing reliance on coal for
energy
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production
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 in these countries, with Denmark and Germany showing significant declines,
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 Sweden and France exhibited more gradual reductions. In 1995, Denmark showed a significant reduction in coal
energy
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production
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. Its coal
energy
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production
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 was around 60% by 1995, but it fell sharply to about 10% by 2010. Germany had the second highest proportion of
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 produced from coal, starting at around 55%.
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 figure showed a significant decline over the years, reaching just under 10% by 2007, and it showed
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 increase to approximately 20% in 2010.
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, Sweden had the lowest reliance on coal throughout the period, starting at just under 40% in 1995 and decreasing to nearly 30% by 2010 and
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 stable until 2010. France
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 experienced
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 pattern, it showed a decrease in coal
energy
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production
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, starting at 30% in 1995 and dropping to about 20% by 2010.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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