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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates the current airport outlook and how it will
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 renovated in
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 year.
Overall
, the renovation plan will contain new establishments
such
 as shops, bag drop, ATM, sky train, and car hire,
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 check-in counter, café, and gates will remain with a little change. It is obvious that the current
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 gates area is going to be redesigned into
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 with 8 additional gates. The walkway will have been demolished and compensated as a new sky train for transport among each gate in
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 year.
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 security passport control area, there will be
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shops
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installation
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 before reaching
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the gate location.
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 there are café and check-in
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 in the departures section
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today, the floor plan has
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added the bag drop and
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the location of
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the café
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 at
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the left
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 corner and
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the check-in
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 counter in front of the bad drop properly.
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 passport control customs region stays constant, care hire, ATM and another café will
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 established for improvement in the next year.
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Task Response
Ensure that all main features of the diagrams are clearly mentioned and compared directly to provide a complete response.
Task Response
Clarify the sequence of changes planned and provide clearer comparisons throughout the essay for a more comprehensive analysis.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance the logical sequencing of information by grouping related changes together for better flow and understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to include a concise conclusion that summarizes the main points discussed.
Task Response
The essay identifies and attempts to compare key changes between the present and future airport designs.
Task Response
Some specific details are mentioned, such as the inclusion of shops and the new sky train, which helps to support the main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay uses some transitional phrases to indicate changes, such as ‘moreover’ and ‘whereas,’ which aid in linking ideas.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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