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This graph shows the proportion of four different material that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

This graph shows the proportion of four different material that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
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The line graph illustrates
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 of four recycled materials for collecting ,
such
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 as paper & cardboard, glass containers, aluminium cans and plastics between 1982-2010.
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,
it is clear that
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 despite the all trends,
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 left unchanged, where the most recycled material was Paper & cardboard,
while
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 the less one indicated plastics. Looking at the details, the figure
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 paper and cardboard started
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 about 65%, before
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slight fluctuation in the first year
afterwards
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 it rose to 80
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while
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 decreasing gradually to 70%, between
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last
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 20 decades .
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, Glass containers
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 significantly in the first 3 years, from 50 % to 40%, after increasing a little in
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1994 to 50%,
then
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 it continued its upward trend till the end of the period with 60% . Turning to the Aluminium cans and plastics, they started with 5 and 2
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, respectively. Where the former depicted
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considerable growth from 5% to 45 %,
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 the latter
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went up, by 2 % between 1990 to 2010, completing with almost 10% in the final year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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