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Compare the benefits of renewable energy vs. Fossil fuels

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In the beginning,all
people
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to
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fossil
fuels
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 because it easily
to solve
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 their problems.
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fuels
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consider
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 the oldest resource
in
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 the earth,so it is cheaper than
ather
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other
resources
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. There are numerous
people
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 innovating a
lot
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 of ways to double fossil
fuels
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,and in
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last
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 15 years ago renewable
energy
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 appeared to
helped
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people
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rethink
about
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the
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resources
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 sustainability.
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,so we will
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discuss
 some benefits of renewable
energy
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 and fossil
fuels
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.
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,fossil
fuels
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 are the most popular and a
lot
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 of
people
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use
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 fossil
fuels
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instead
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 of renewable
energy
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that
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required
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 a
lot
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 of care at the
must
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most
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 time.
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,solar
energy
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that
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require
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 a
lot
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bords
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boards
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 and cables. Fossil
fuels
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easier
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 to
use
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 than renewable
energy
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,and it
considering
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 ability
to
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 all
people
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 because
it
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 cost a little ,and
faster
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are more
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efficiency
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 than other energies.
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,it is simple to deal with it.
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, There are several
pors
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reasons
of
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using
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fossil
fuels
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,
one
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and one
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 of them is investing
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this
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these
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resources
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 with other countries.
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, Iraq has 5% fossil
fuels
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 of
world
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the world
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,so if
Iraqian
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Iraq
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this
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 percentage with neer by country
that's
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 can
helped
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help
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economic
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 development of Iraq to be worldwide .
Inaddition
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In addition
,some
people
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 prefer fossil
fuols
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fuels
 because it's expectable for climate change.
for example
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, we can't
use
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 renewable
energy
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such
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 as wind
in
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energy
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 and sunny
day
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days
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.
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, there are numerous
people
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prefer
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who prefer
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 to
use
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 renewable
energy
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such
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 as solar
energy
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energy
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energy
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 because it is storageable . Some
people
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 want to
protected
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environment
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the environment
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 so they buy solar panels. For
the
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more,renewable
energy
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such
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 as solar, wind or any type of
energy
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consider
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 sustainable
resources
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.
for example
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, fossil
fuels
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consider
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are considered
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from
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resources
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resource
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 depletion but the search or wind
are exist
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exists
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 all most time.
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, they can't see all
benefits
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the benefits
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all
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of all
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fuels
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 and they
seen
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 just some point of prose to
use
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 reenable
energy
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.
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, fossil
of
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fuels
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is
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better
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a better
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 type of
energy
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 that can give you fast
effective
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 for a long time and with
high-quality
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high quality
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also
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 fossil
fuels
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 have some
policy
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policies
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 that
protected
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 the users unlike reenable
energy
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 because you buy it on your
responsibility
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own responsibility
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. In
conclusion
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 there are differences between
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people
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people's
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 preferences
about
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for
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 using fossil of
fuels
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that
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some prefer to
use
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 renewable
energy
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.
In
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addition
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resources
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 can help humanity to continue their life but all
human
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humans
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 has his or her way
to live
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of living
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 by using fossil
fuels
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 or reenable
energy
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coherence cohesion
Focus on improving clarity and coherence. Try to connect the paragraphs more smoothly by employing linking words and phrases. Examples include 'furthermore,' 'however,' and 'on the other hand.'
coherence cohesion
Ensure the essay is proofread to eliminate spelling and grammatical errors. Pay attention to common misspellings and incorrect verb forms.
task achievement
The response should clearly address all parts of the task in detail. Try to balance the discussion on renewable energy and fossil fuels.
task achievement
Develop ideas more fully to improve depth of discussion. Provide more detailed examples and explanations for each point made to strengthen arguments.
task achievement
The essay attempts to provide a balanced discussion between renewable energy and fossil fuels, which is the main focus of the task.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and a conclusion to frame the discussion.
task achievement
The use of examples, such as the impact of Iraq's fossil fuel reserves, is a good attempt to incorporate relevant specifics.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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