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Compare the benefits of renewable energy vs. Fossil fuels

#energy #fuels
In the beginning,all
people
 used
to
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fossil
fuels
 because it easily
to solve
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solved
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 their problems.
Also
,fossil
fuels
consider
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are considered
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 the oldest resource
in
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on
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 the earth,so it is cheaper than
ather
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other
resources
. There are numerous
people
 innovating a
lot
 of ways to double fossil
fuels
,and in
last
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the last
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 15 years ago renewable
energy
 appeared to
helped
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help
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people
to
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apply
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rethink
about
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the
resources
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resource's
resources'
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 sustainability.
Forthamore
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Furthermore
, how they could
investing
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invest
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,so we will
descuse
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discuss
 some benefits of renewable
energy
 and fossil
fuels
.
Firstly
,fossil
fuels
 are the most popular and a
lot
 of
people
 prefer to
use
 fossil
fuels
instead
 of renewable
energy
that
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which
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required
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requires
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 a
lot
 of care at the
must
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most
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 time.
For example
,solar
energy
that
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apply
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require
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requires
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 a
lot
 of
bords
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boards
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 and cables. Fossil
fuels
easier
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are easier
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 to
use
 than renewable
energy
,and it
considering
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considered
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 ability
to
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by
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 all
people
 because
it
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they
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 cost a little ,and
faster
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are more
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efficiency
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efficient
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 than other energies.
Also
,it is simple to deal with it.
Secondly
, There are several
pors
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reasons
of
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for
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using
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apply
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fossil
fuels
,
one
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and one
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 of them is investing
this
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these
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resources
 with other countries.
For instance
, Iraq has 5% fossil
fuels
 of
world
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the world
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,so if
Iraqian
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Iraq
 invaded
this
 percentage with neer by country
that's
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that
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 can
helped
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help
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economic
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the economic
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 development of Iraq to be worldwide .
Inaddition
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In addition
,some
people
 prefer fossil
fuols
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fuels
 because it's expectable for climate change.
for example
, we can't
use
 renewable
energy
such
 as wind
in
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apply
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energy
 and sunny
day
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days
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.
Thirdly
, there are numerous
people
prefer
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who prefer
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 to
use
 renewable
energy
such
 as solar
energy
energy
energy
 because it is storageable . Some
people
 want to
protected
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protect
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environment
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the environment
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 so they buy solar panels. For
the
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apply
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more,renewable
energy
such
 as solar, wind or any type of
energy
consider
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is considered
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 sustainable
resources
.
for example
, fossil
fuels
consider
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are considered
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from
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for
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resources
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resource
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 depletion but the search or wind
are exist
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exists
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 all most time.
However
, they can't see all
benefits
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the benefits
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all
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of all
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 fossil
fuels
 and they
seen
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see
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 just some point of prose to
use
 reenable
energy
.
In addition
, fossil
of
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apply
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fuels
is
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are
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better
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a better
the better
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 type of
energy
 that can give you fast
effective
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and effective
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 for a long time and with
high-quality
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high quality
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also
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Also
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 fossil
fuels
 have some
policy
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policies
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 that
protected
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protect
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 the users unlike reenable
energy
 because you buy it on your
responsibility
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own responsibility
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. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 there are differences between
people
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people's
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 preferences
about
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for
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 using fossil of
fuels
that
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apply
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some prefer to
use
 renewable
energy
.
In
addition
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addition,
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resources
 can help humanity to continue their life but all
human
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humans
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 has his or her way
to live
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of living
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 by using fossil
fuels
 or reenable
energy
.
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coherence cohesion
Focus on improving clarity and coherence. Try to connect the paragraphs more smoothly by employing linking words and phrases. Examples include 'furthermore,' 'however,' and 'on the other hand.'
coherence cohesion
Ensure the essay is proofread to eliminate spelling and grammatical errors. Pay attention to common misspellings and incorrect verb forms.
task achievement
The response should clearly address all parts of the task in detail. Try to balance the discussion on renewable energy and fossil fuels.
task achievement
Develop ideas more fully to improve depth of discussion. Provide more detailed examples and explanations for each point made to strengthen arguments.
task achievement
The essay attempts to provide a balanced discussion between renewable energy and fossil fuels, which is the main focus of the task.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and a conclusion to frame the discussion.
task achievement
The use of examples, such as the impact of Iraq's fossil fuel reserves, is a good attempt to incorporate relevant specifics.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

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Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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