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The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The diagram gives information about how a method of shaping
glass
container
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containers
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.
Overall
, the diagram illustrates the most important of
nine
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the nine
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 steps of shaping
glass
 with
begin put
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putting
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 the glasses into
furnace
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the furnace
a furnace
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to show
Verb problem
and
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 the
last
 step with packaging
recycling
Correct word choice
and recycling
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 the
glass
. First of all, the
glass
 is heated
with
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at
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a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
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high
temperatures
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temperature
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it
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apply
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105c of
furnace
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the furnace
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next,
the hot
glass
 is taken to press with mould
then
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and then
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 is pressed.
The next step is
containered
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to contain
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 by thick wall after that the stage is aired to
made
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make
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 the
glass
subsequently
 the
glass
is going
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goes
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 into the machine
with
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at
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increasing
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increasingly
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 hot temperatures
in addition
when
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the
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 end
to
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of
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this
 stage the
glass
 will be ready to move to
different
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a different
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 machine with working to cooling the
glass
moreover
 there is a timer about one hours . The
glass
now
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is now
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 ready to check from the worker . The final step
check
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checks
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 the test if the
glass
 is passed or was failed.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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