Some employers are giving more value on hiring people with good social skills apart from good qualifications. Do yiu agree or disagree that social skills are just as crucial as good qulification for success work?

Hiring employees usually
consider
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both
a
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good social
skills
and
qualifications
,
however
, comparing those 2 parts the employers quite often
chose
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people who
has
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a good soft
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good soft skills
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skills
rather than hard
skills
. I firmly agree with
this
view that collaboration between social
skills
and supported by high
qualifications
are 2 important things for
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a goal.
Overall
, when comparing social competence and
proficiences
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proficiency
proficiencies
, both are essential but serve different purposes, depending on the
contex
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context
. to
adress
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address
the goal, it's very important to encounter those parts. Social
skills
such
as
,
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interpersonal abilities, adaptability, and leadership. Strong strong social ability
usually
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associated
for
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management or
as
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a
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leadership, whether
manage
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projects or
manage
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teams. 
On the other hand
, high
qualifications
are
also
a
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fundamental to a
success
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work. Technical expertise, like degrees, certification,
spesialized
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specialized
specialised
training and technical ability are parameters that recruiters need to consider
beside
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the soft abilities.
To conclude
,
while
qualifications
are
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demonstrate expertise and are
ofter
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often
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require
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for specific jobs, social
skills
are critical for
colaboration
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collaboration
and leadership,
means
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which means
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that soft
skills
and hard
skill
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skills
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are crucial for
success
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successful
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work.
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task achievement
The essay should provide more specific examples to illustrate the points made. For example, mention specific professions where social skills are specifically valued, or real-life situations where social skills contribute significantly to job performance.
coherence cohesion
Consider expanding your introduction to better frame the discussion. Perhaps include more context as to why employers might prioritize social skills today.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving sentence variety and clarity. Some sentences are complex and slightly difficult to understand, particularly in terms of grammatical structuring.
task achievement
You clearly understand the importance of balancing social skills with technical qualifications in a working environment.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed, showing a clear stance about the topic.

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