Some people say that that working at home is beneficial to the worker and the family while others believe that it is stressful to both the worker and the family. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that employees and their families are getting benefits from working from
home
scheme.
However
, others argue that it can cause
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stress
for both parties.
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two sides and I agree with the former since its benefits outweigh the latter. On the one hand,
working from
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home
schemes are often designed to have flexible working hours which gives the
workers
freedom
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to choose when to finish their
job
so they can do other tasks
such
as doing house chores.
Furthermore
, there is no need to commute to
workplace
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the workplace
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and
this
significantly reduces the
stress
of the
workers
.
For instance
, some companies in Indonesia let their employees decide whether they want to
work
at the office or at
home
for a day every week to reduce the mental
stress
of the
workers
.
Therefore
, working from
home
is proven to be advantageous for the
workers
to prevent them from getting overwhelmed at
work
.
On the other hand
,
this
scheme can
also
bring some potential drawbacks
such
as getting disturbed by a family member
while
working which can lead to losing focus.
Moreover
, for an outgoing and sociable individual, working from
home
might cause
stress
since interaction only happens with family and only little conversation
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with other
workers
.
For example
, an
acquintance
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acquaintance
of mine who had a remote
job
with healthy working hours and
good
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salary left his
job
to
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a
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full-time onsite
work
as he preferred a
job
that
allows
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him to socialize with other people.
Therefore
, working from
home
is not suitable for
workers
who are extroverted.
However
,
this
also
means that a less sociable person
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working at
home
since interaction between
workers
are
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not mandatory. In conclusion,
although
people perceive that working from
home
is stressful for both
workers
and families, I strongly believe that it offers more advantages for the
workers
since it provides flexibility and
it
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reduces
stress
from commuting and socializing
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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion and ensure it is reflected throughout your essay. Although your conclusion mentions your stance, integrating it consistently into the body paragraphs would make your argument clearer.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try using transition words such as 'however', 'moreover', and 'therefore' more strategically to connect ideas within paragraphs and improve overall flow.
Task Achievement
The essay presents both views effectively and provides relevant examples to support each point. This strengthens the argument and shows a balanced discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing both sides of the argument, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow your line of reasoning.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Remote work
  • Telecommuting
  • Work-life balance
  • Productivity
  • Flexibility
  • Isolation
  • Distractions
  • Customized work environment
  • Work encroachment
  • Communication challenges
  • Family bonds
  • Traditional workplace
  • Time management
  • Personalized workspace
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