The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country.

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The given bar charts show the total percentages of

film

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films

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released and cinema ticket

sales

, broken down into four different genres in 1996 and 2006.

Overall

, it can be clearly observed that

film

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films

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involved

Drama

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in Drama

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were released the most,

whereas

that of

sales

of comedy received

highest

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the highest

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sales

among all types of movies.

However

, it is interesting to note that the

romance

recieved

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received

lowest

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the lowest

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attention

along with

limited

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a limited

the limited

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number of releases.

To begin

with, a closer look at the chart in 1996

show

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shows

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that at just above 25%,

Drama

accounted for the greatest percentages in

film

releases, followed by comedy, fantasy and

romance

at 20%,12%, and 7%, respectively.

Similary

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Similarly

, despite the fact that the percentage of

film

releases in 2006 shared

similar

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a similar

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trend,

romance

was the only genre that remained stable

while

the other threes were on the rise. With regards to ticket

sales

, in 1996, it

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expected that

drama

received

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receive

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greatest

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the greatest

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sales

but it was overtaken by

commedy

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comedy

at 20%.

While

Drama

become

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became

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second place at approximately 16%,

romance

and fantasy

was

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apply

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accounted for at 5% and 3%, respectively. A decade later, all three genres experienced the rise,

romance

was the only one that dropped to half of its previous figures.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words film, sales, drama, romance with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.

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