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Some people believe that in near future, the role of teachers will be diminished and they will be replaced by robots and AI. To what extent do you agree?

#people #future #role #teachers #robots
In the future technology and AI will be improved but people never can be changed
teachers
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robot
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.Because robots can'
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 feel emotions and
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 the job at school misunderstanding students
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 most important thing. At the moment robots don'
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 have high quality and development. So, teachers will teach
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hundreds
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 years absolutely. If teachers can teach interesting and emotionally,robots can'
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 do that.
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big
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 difference between
human
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 and AI.Science didn'
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 find
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 way where the robot can feel.
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 long time before it was.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Diminished
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Critical thinking
  • Human interaction
  • Technological advancements
  • Educational inequality
  • Complement
  • Societal resistance
  • Ethical considerations
  • Cognitive skills
  • Pedagogy
  • Adaptability
  • Empathy
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