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The chart below shows the most common difficulties people face when living in a foreign country, categorized by age group.

The chart below shows the most common difficulties people face when living in a foreign country, categorized by age group.
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The image depicts the most frequent difficulties that
individiuals
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individuals
 confront during their lives in another country. At first glance, it can be seen that different age groups experience different challenges. A closer inspection of the graph reveals that young and middle-aged
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individuals
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accomodation
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accommodation
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 main difficulty for both groups with
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 percentage of approximately 40. As
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can be seen from
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, learning the
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 new country and making friends
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 the second main problem for 35-54 aged people which is equal to 35-36% respectively.
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 learning a new language is not a major problem for young individuals, 46% of them observe issues
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 trying to make new friends. When it comes to the
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, they do not have serious issues during the stage that they try to find a place to stay or make friends. They mostly suffer when they try to learn and adapt new language of the place which contains a little more than
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half of all
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problems
 with 54%.
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