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The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart illustrates the proportion of
people
 with college degrees and the employment rate with annual income in eight European
countries
 in 2015.
Overall
,
Norway
 had the highest yearly average salaries with almost 41500
while
 Bulgaria had the lowest with exactly 3332, respectively.
Moreover
,
UK
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the UK
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 had the second
high
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highest
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 annual income after
Norway
 with approximately 41500. In regard to citizens who work,
Norway
,
UK
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the UK
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 and Austria seemed to
be
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have
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 the highest
in
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apply
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employment
rate
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rates
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 with 74.8% , 72,7% and 71.1% .
On the contrary
, Greece is the lowest country in Europe with properly 50% of the
people
work
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working
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 there.
According to
 the
countries
 with university education,
Norway
 ,
UK
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the UK
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 and Luxembourg are the most
countries
 with
proportion
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proportions
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 43.2%,41,6% and 41.1%
while
 Portugal is the
least
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lowest
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 percentage in
people
 education with only 22.9%. In general,
countries
 which had the highest numbers of
people
 with college degrees are the most paid in average income.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, countries, norway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Higher education attainment
  • Correlation
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Outliers
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural influences
  • Policy implications
  • Gender differences
  • Youth employment
  • Age-segmented
  • Statistics
  • Comparative analysis
  • Data interpretation
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