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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the
production
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 levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK during the period between 1981 and 2000.
Overall
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, the UK produced petroleum
in
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at
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 the highest
level
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. In the first ten years, the
production
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level
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 of coal was still higher than natural
gas
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, except for 1984. But
then
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 after 1991, natural
gas
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start
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started
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 to be produced more than coal, and the gap between those two
production
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 levels was getting wider and wider. It is certain that petroleum was always the most popular fuel to produce in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Petroleum
production
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's image fluctuates between 90 and 140
energy
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units
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. It reached the highest point in 1999 with a number of about 143,
while
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that is
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 90
energy
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units
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 for the lowest point in 1981. Coal
production
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, starting at the
level
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 of 80
energy
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units
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,
it
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apply
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first went flat,
then
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 sharply decreased. After a year, it increased to the
level
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 of 60
units
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,
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 and slowly
being
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produced less and less after 1989. Beginning with less than 40, natural
gas
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production
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 remained basically stable until 1990 when it slowly increased. In 2000, natural
gas
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production
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 arrived at the highest point, which is a few more than 100
energy
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units
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, level, gas, energy, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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