The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates
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the distribution

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between different age groups in New
Zeland
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Zealand

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from 2011 to 2012.
Overall
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, it could be seen that during one year statistics did not change dramatically, but there were slight changes. It could be seen that age segments from 15 to 39 years and from 40 to 64 years are much
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bigger

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than other ones.
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the
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of people under 15 is twice
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smaller
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small

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than
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as

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middle-aged
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the middle-aged

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segment and the
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of
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elderly

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people older than 65 is three times less populated than
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the 15

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-39
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, the 40-64
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is about 10-15 percent smaller. Turning to the time changes during the
one yaer
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one-year

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period, it could be noticed that the highest income was in the oldest
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equalled
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4%.
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value
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others because
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differences

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other groups are less than 1% and categories under 40 are having
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a slight

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decrease
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apply

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all
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. Taking
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it all

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together, it can be seen that
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the total

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population increased a bit, but
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a closer

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look
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at

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the table tells
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that
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us that

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is caused by the
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last

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group
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represented
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the table.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • age group
  • increase
  • decline
  • elderly population
  • aging population
  • working-age population
  • stable labor force
  • modest increase
  • significant change
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