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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the result of a survey about
coffee
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 and tea purchasing and drinking habits in five cities in Australia.
Overall
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, the chart shows that most
people
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 in the five cities
prefered
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preferred
 to go to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea in the
last
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 4 weeks,
while
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 the percentage
for
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of
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people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 during
this
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pediod
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period
 was the lowest. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that the most popular habit was going to a cafe to drink
coffee
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 or tea, which was around 61%, 64%, 56%, and 63% in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane and Hobart respectively. Meanwhile, purchasing fresh
coffee
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 was the least welcomed choice, accounting for about 34% in Brisbane, which was the lowest among all the figures.
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,
people
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's
preference
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preferences
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 in Adelaide
was
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were
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 different. The proportion of
people
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 who
purchase
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purchased
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 instant
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks was around 50%, slightly higher than the proportion
for
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of
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 residents who went to a cafe.
However
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, the habit of buying fresh
coffee
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 was still unpopular relatively, representing 34% of city residents, which was similar
with
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to
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 the share of
this
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 habit in Brisbane.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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