Most people accept that we now live in a globalized world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalization a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays, the countries have
expended
their relations with other nations. They are socializing in terms of economy, trade, culture and education, which have made the world a global village. Many people think that it is beneficial, Correct your spelling
expanded
whereas
the
others assume that it has some negative impact as well. I completely agree with both Correct article usage
apply
the
ideas and will support my opinion in Correct article usage
apply
this
essay with examples.
As we
are in the era of globalization, which has benefited people in many ways. Correct word choice
We
Firstly
,the development in communication
sectorAdd an article
the communication
,
has made it easier for Remove the comma
apply
the
individuals to be in contact with the inhabitants of other territories. Different social apps like Correct article usage
apply
whatsapp
, Correct your spelling
WhatsApp
Whatsapp
facebook
, Capitalize word
Facebook
instagram
etc have contributed in many ways. Change the capitalization
Instagram
However
, in past times, contact with loved ones was too difficult and time consuming
. Add a hyphen
time-consuming
Secondly
, globalization has made traveling
easier. In past the number of international travellers was about 5000 per year, which has Change the spelling
travelling
expended
to 50000 visitors, a year. Now people can easily Correct your spelling
expanded
rome
from country to country, for educational and trade purposes. Correct your spelling
travel
Thirdly
, nations are aware of things happening within their neighbouring states, while
it was a myth in past because they have
to send a team for investigation in those regions, to provide assistance. Wrong verb form
had
For instance
, during the widespread of COVID-19, every state was ready to help humans all around the world. Even when the earthquake hit Pakistan back in 2005, than US and china
, immediately sent food items and camps for the residents, which is another example of Capitalize word
China
globalized
village.
Correct article usage
a globalized
Furthermore
, the other group assume that it has some negative impact on the lives of humans. As there is no concept of privacy any more. Social media has unvailed
the entire universe. No country can keep any secrets these days. Correct your spelling
unveiled
Lets's
take the example of Iraq, a small post has notified the Veto Countries about its secret mission of Correct subject-verb agreement
Let's
necular
experiments, which was Correct your spelling
secular
nuclear
then
destroyed in days. Additionally
, the
religions and cultures are Correct article usage
apply
at
the brink of destruction. Because of Change preposition
on
globalization
individuals are more Add a comma
globalization,
intrested
in Correct your spelling
interested
other's
religions and norms and they are even trying to Change noun form
other
adobt
Correct your spelling
adopt
adapt
it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
For example
, this
globalized world is a huge threat to islam
and Change the capitalization
Islam
hinduism
. As more and more Change the capitalization
Hinduism
hindus
are converting to Islam and Change the capitalization
Hindus
on the other hand
muslims are trying to adopt eastern
norms and values.
In conclusion, it won't be wrong to say that Nations are dependent on each Capitalize word
Eastern
others
in Change to a singular noun
other
this
global village, whether its
education, culture or contacts. But it would not be wrong to say that it brings a lot of positivity and negativity. If it has made countries socialized, Correct your spelling
it's
then
it has also
threathen
their privacy as well.Correct your spelling
threatened
threaten
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