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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Firstly
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, the graphic gives information regarding
number
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a number
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 of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. After that we have three categories ‘The coast, The
mountains
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, The lakes’.
Than
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 we have five years. These are 1987, 1992, 1997, 2002 and 2007.
Secondly
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, when we look at the table The
mountains
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has
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 much rate is 35 in 2002 and 2007.
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Also
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Also,
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 The lakes
has
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had
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 much ratio is 75 in 2002. The
mountais
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mountains
mountain
is
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are
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 less than The lakes.
Furthermore
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 The
coast
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cost
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has
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 less rate is 35 in 1992. As an extra the most less rate is 10 in 1987.
Tirdly
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Thirdly
, the chart which is above mentioned describes selecting and reporting the main features, and
make
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making
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 comparisons where relevant. From my point of view, I strongly believe that the most high rates are The coast and The
mountains
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. Later
on
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 the most nominal ratios are The
mountains
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 and The lakes. These ratios are 10 and 20 in 1987 between 1997.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mountains with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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