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The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.
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The chart illustrates the worldwide
sales
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 of 4 types of digital
games
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 in billions of
dollars
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 between 2000 and 2006.
It is clear that
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 handheld
games
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are
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 the most sold item in that period.
By contrast
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, online
games
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 have not had any
sales
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 in 2000. All of the
sales
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 grew steadily in
this
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 period except console
games
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 which had decreased over the mentioned years. In the year 2001, mobile phone
games
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 started to be sold
in
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for
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 less than 1 billion
dollars
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, but in the next year the amount of
sales
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 was equal
with
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to
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 online
games
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, and they were both have been sold for nearly 1 billion
dollars
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. Their competition in
sales
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 remained almost the same until the year 2006,
online
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when online
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games
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 passed mobile phone
games
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’s
sales
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 for over
than
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apply
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a billion
dollars
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, games, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trends
  • Surpassed
  • Advent
  • Steady growth
  • Fluctuating sales
  • Technological advancements
  • Proliferation
  • Year-on-year growth
  • Factors influencing
  • Peak sales
  • Demographic shifts
  • Engagement
  • Driving the sales
  • Blockbuster titles
  • Major game releases
  • Spurring
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