The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.
The chart illustrates the worldwide
sales
of 4 types of digital
games
in billions of
dollars
between 2000 and 2006.
It is clear that
handheld
games
are
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the most sold item in that period.
By contrast
, online
games
have not had any
sales
in 2000. All of the
sales
grew steadily in
this
period except console
games
which had decreased over the mentioned years. In the year 2001, mobile phone
games
started to be sold
in
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for
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less than 1 billion
dollars
, but in the next year the amount of
sales
was equal
with
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to
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online
games
, and they were both have been sold for nearly 1 billion
dollars
. Their competition in
sales
remained almost the same until the year 2006,
online
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when online
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games
passed mobile phone
games
’s
sales
for over
than
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apply
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a billion
dollars
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, games, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trends
  • Surpassed
  • Advent
  • Steady growth
  • Fluctuating sales
  • Technological advancements
  • Proliferation
  • Year-on-year growth
  • Factors influencing
  • Peak sales
  • Demographic shifts
  • Engagement
  • Driving the sales
  • Blockbuster titles
  • Major game releases
  • Spurring
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