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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The schedule and graphs depict data about
budget
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the budget
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 for 2017 and 2018 in one region of Britain. The schedule illustrates the
money
’s origin and the pie charts
perform
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 the
money
 distribution.
Overall
, the police
budget
 in 2017 and 2018 came from two major sources
of
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national government and local taxes
following
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 by other origins like grants. The
budget
 was mainly spent
for
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 salaries, technology, and
also
 buildings and technology. Looking at the details, the
money
 which came from
national
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the national
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 government in 2017 was 175.5m
in contrast
 with 2018
that
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it
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 was 177.8m. The
budget
 from local taxes in 2017 was nowhere near as much as
2018
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in 2018
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 with 91.2m and 102.3m respectively. Other sources of
money
 like grants involved around 38m of
budget
 in both years mentioned in the question. If we look at how the
money
 was spent in 2017 and 2018, salaries took the first place with 75% in 2017 and 69% in 2018. The distribution of
budget
 in buildings and transport was the same in both years with 17%. Despite 8% of the
money
was
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 given to
the
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technology in 2017, the amount of
budget
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the budget
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 was increased to 14% in 2018.
This
 may caused by increasing demand for technological properties.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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