Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

It is considered by some people, whenever
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any bad situation
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in life it is good to accept it as it is,
while
, some
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we should try and improve
such
situations
. I believe it best to analyse the
problem
and try to solve it, but
for
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sometimes
situations
are
that
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worst,
we
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and we
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left
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with only
one
choice to accept it and move on. If there is any
problem
in life, we should try to solve it, rather
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than
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running away from it.
First
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thing anyone can do,
find
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the root cause of
problem
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the problem
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. When we get to know about the cause of it, try to search for
method
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a method
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which helps to
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it. After getting the
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solution try to implement it in
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life, after multiple attempts surely we will come out
from
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bad
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a bad
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situation.
For example
: it is very difficult for a less experienced person to switch a job, after improving himself, and by learning new skills, he can achieve a good job. Sometimes
situations
are not
undercontrol
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under control
, it will
left
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us with only
one
option to accept the
situations
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as it is.
For instance
, if we
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some
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someone
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very close to us, it will be very difficult for
any
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anyone
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one
to come out from
this
pain.
Only
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The only
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suggested option is to accept the
situations
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situation
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and try to move
one
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on
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. It can be seen that because of overthinking
this
lead to mental
problem
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problems
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like depression.
To conclude
, It
total
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depend
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on the type of
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, if we have control and it can
be solve
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by
hardwork
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hard work
,
then
we should try to improve it. But, for uncontrolled problems it
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goods
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good
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to accept
it
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them
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and try to move on as soon as possible.
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coherence cohesion
Try to avoid run-on sentences and ensure each sentence clearly conveys one idea.
task achievement
Add more specific examples or details to support the arguments, particularly on the benefits of accepting bad situations.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, which provides a logical structure.
task achievement
The introduction efficiently outlines both views and provides the writer's opinion, setting a clear direction for the essay.

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