You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager.

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Dear Mr Johnson The reason why I am addressing

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letter to you is that I wanted to get a holiday,because of several reasons. I would be over the moon if you

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me.

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I love my job and my colleagues,I should get time off for 2 weeks. I have two reasons, at the outset,I want to go to the hospital,because of my son. He broke his leg several days ago and he feels bad for himself. Yesterday he felt pain and he could not sleep till 4 a.m. I'm scared and I must go to the bone doctor.

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,my brother is marrying after ten days and I must participate in his wedding day.

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,as I have not gone to my village for five years, my parents,uncles and aunts missed me. They want to see me on

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wedding day and they wrote a letter that if I can go to our home before Sunday,they will be happy. After finishing the holiday,I am ready to work 2 hours more in the next 2 weeks. And I give my word that I will do all projects,which I skipped. I hope you can give me time off and I will be waiting for a reply letter from you as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Kim Chin In

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Coherence and Cohesion

Consider linking related ideas more smoothly to enhance logical flow.

Coherence and Cohesion

Adding more transitional phrases can help unite your ideas into a cohesive response.

Task Achievement

The letter could be slightly more concise while still addressing all necessary points.

Coherence and Cohesion

The greeting and closing of your letter are polite and professional, setting a good tone.

Task Achievement

You provided a clear explanation of your reasons for taking time off.

Task Achievement

The tone of the letter is appropriate for a professional request, being polite and courteous.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

10 paragraphs

217 words

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