Littering in cities is an increasing problem which needs to be dealt with. Some people think that steeper fines is the best way to deal with the problem. To what extent do you agree?

There is a significant increment of littering in cities
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that,
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might help in
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situation as people believed.
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with
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fines
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this
issue
. On the one hand, littering is a really bad thing and it's come from people who have
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bad attitude and careless. Education and families are responsible
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that; they both should teach their children how important
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of them as
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being
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, when the schools
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childreen
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children
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, they will not do
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as
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thing when they grow up. The UK focus on
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thing and each school
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of
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focusing on each student to through his littering in the right place. And we can see the result of
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thing in the UK
street
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which are very clean.
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, steeper
fines
would help a lot with
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issue
, you can't prevent people
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doing
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this
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thing
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without charging them for
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attitude which is not good at all. If the government applied
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steepest
steeper
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on each person who
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the instruction of putting
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littering in the
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garbage
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place; I believe most of
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be solve
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. My country
consider
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putting or
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throwing
through
littering in the streets or any other place as
violation
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and
this
violation will cost around 100$. You can see how is my
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streets clean and
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hygienic
. In conclusion,
littering
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issue
which
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in most
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the
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cities around the world can
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by applying steeper
fines
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task achievement
To improve the response to the task, make sure your essay fully addresses all parts of the question. Right now, the essay is somewhat repetitive and does not explore the topic in depth. Consider discussing potential drawbacks of steeper fines or explore other solutions to littering as well.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more effectively. The essay needs clearer topic sentences and better paragraph transitions to enhance logical flow. Consider using linking phrases and vocabulary to connect your ideas smoothly.
supported main points
Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence that outlines the main idea, followed by examples and explanations that support this idea. Enhance the development of your main points to ensure they are well-supported.
introduction conclusion
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, which contributes positively to the structure.
relevant specific examples
The essay acknowledges the importance of education and fines regarding littering and provides relevant examples from the UK and your country, which add value to the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban sanitation
  • Deterrence
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Public awareness
  • Civic responsibility
  • Enforcement measures
  • Sanctions
  • Penalties
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Behavioral change
  • Socio-economic impact
  • Cost-effective
  • Infrastructure for waste management
  • Community service
  • Sustainable practices
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