The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps compare a museum's changes in interior configuration in 1998 and 2008.
In general, some new outlets and facilities were added to the museum.
Furthermore
, permanent exhibitions were consistently relocated to the right side. As for the opposite side, the space was mainly used for stores, eateries, and a temporary exhibition room.
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According to
the layout on the map, three large permanent exhibitions were distributed on both sides of the garden, and their areas made up over half of the museum. Linking Words
However
, the space they took up shrank and they were all allocated to the right area. Linking Words
Besides
, in the case of a temporary one, it was in the lower left corner, and Linking Words
next,
moved to the straight left of the garden.
Regarding the garden, there were only plants in the park. Linking Words
Next,
the fountains and a Cafe sitting area were established here after a decade.
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Moreover
, a Cafe, a shop, a restroom, and a store called "Bags and Coats" were Linking Words
also
moved to other positions. Linking Words
Additionally
, the size of every place has changed, some were expanded, and others were reduced. Linking Words
Also
, a new restaurant was built in the upper left corner.
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Finally
, the entrance hall where there were ticket-vending counters has remained in the same position over the past ten years.Linking Words
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