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The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture depicts a
school
 in 1985 and its transformation now.
Overall
, there
are
Wrong verb form
have been
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 substantial changes in the
school
 from 1985 until now, and by 1985
the
Capitalize word
The
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school
 only accommodated 1,500 students,
whereas
 it can currently provide 800 more students
from
Change preposition
than in
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 1985. To commence, by 1985, there was a
car
park
 on the north side of the
school
,
Remove the comma
apply
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 and an office
at
Change preposition
on
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 the left side of the
car
park
.
Moreover
, at the south of the office, there was a library, and a
car
park
 and
classrooms
 were located beside the library. In front of the
car
park
 and
class room
Correct your spelling
classroom
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 was a road that separated those 2 buildings from
other classroom block
Change the wording
another classroom block
other classroom blocks
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 (2 storeys).
In addition
,
a huge playing fields
Correct the article-noun agreement
huge playing fields
a huge playing field
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 stood at the south end of the
school
, covering almost half of the
school
.
On the other hand
, regarding the
school
 condition recently, a
car
park
 and office
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 still located at the same
locaiton
Correct your spelling
location
 from 1985,
while
 the library
is
Wrong verb form
has been
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 converted into a learning resources centre and computer room, and the
classrooms
 have moved into the southern part of the computer room. Beside
classrooms
 is built a pool and fitness centre, which reduce the size of the playing fields.
However
, the road in the middle of the
school
 is replaced by trees, and there are classroom
block
Fix the agreement mistake
blocks
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 (3 storeys) and
classrooms
 beside the trees.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car, park, classrooms with synonyms.
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