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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company or organization. What might be the cases? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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Recently a lot of workers have decided to have a self-employed career rather than working for someone else.
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 sure has pros and cons which will be discussed in
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 essay.
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, working by yourself makes the shift's hours more flexible.
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, since there is no boss deciding for you, you can decide when to go on vacation freely, in every period of the year.
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, all the budget will be in your hands, meaning it could be spent the way you prefer and all the earnings will
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 be only yours.
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, if working online is possible in the sector you
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 in, it is possible to
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 everywhere in the world, meaning that the place you will live is not influenced by where you
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.
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, working for a company is much safer from an economic point of view. In fact, by being an employee, you are guaranteed a salary every month, unless the place goes bankrupt but it is really rare to happen.
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, companies usually provide some advantages for those who
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 for them,
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, health insurance, a car or even accommodation sometimes, which can make you save a big amount of money that can be spent on something else. An additional advantage is that nowadays, modern workplaces are becoming
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goal-centred
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 rather than
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time-centred
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, so you can
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 for as much as you want as long as you finish your task. In conclusion, the safety guaranteed by working for an organization is not comparable to working as a self-employed.
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,
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 is still the best option for workers, unless governments decide to help more people who
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 by themself.

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coherence cohesion
Work on enhancing the logical flow of ideas. Although the essay follows a basic structure, try to ensure that one idea leads smoothly to the next without any abrupt shifts.
task achievement
To achieve a more comprehensive task response, include more specific examples or statistical data if possible to strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
When discussing advantages and disadvantages, ensure that each point is thoroughly explained to understand why it’s a pro or a con clearly.
introduction conclusion
Clear introduction and conclusion that neatly frames the argument and the discussion.
logical structure
The essay asserts relevant and well-reasoned points with clear explanations to support each main idea.
complete response
Successfully addresses both parts of the task by identifying reasons for self-employment and discussing its disadvantages.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • align
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • advancements in technology
  • entrepreneurial spirit
  • financial rewards
  • constraints
  • employee benefits
  • administrative tasks
  • financial instability
  • job insecurity
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