Some university students want to learn about other subjects, in addition to their main subjects. other believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. discuss both these wheels and give your own opinion.
Studying
other
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another subject
other subjects
subject
apart from the main subject
is very common for student
in college. Fix the agreement mistake
students
This
trend gains pros and contras, whereas
some people think that it is essential to focus and commit to the subject
which leads to expertise. However
I firmly agree with student
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the student
want
to study Change the verb form
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others
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other subjects
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beyond
,
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apply
others
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other
be exclude
, but it's very important.
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influence
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the
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, you need to learn all Wrong verb form
engineering
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subjects
programmer
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programming
computer related
.
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computer-related
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, learning other
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society which Correct article usage
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soft skills
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skills
, leadership, and other softkills
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soft skills
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skills
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a combination
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lead
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leads
a powerful knowledge
.
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a piece of powerful knowledge
To conclude
, learning specific
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a specific
subject
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attentions
is very important if you want to be Fix the agreement mistake
attention
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however,
also
essential to learn other
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Task Response
Consider refining your thesis statement to more clearly define your stance and the arguments you will explore. This will help guide your essay more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on linking your paragraphs more effectively. Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next to maintain a coherent flow of ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Avoid run-on sentences and focus on sentence variety. This will help improve the clarity and readability of your writing, making your arguments more precise.
Structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in framing the discussion.
Task Response
Good use of examples, such as the example of a software engineer, to support your main ideas.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
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