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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.
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The pie charts provide information about the source of electricity in two countries in 2009.
Overall
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, the utilization of renewable sources was still very low in
Germany
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 and
France
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,
while
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 the various types of renewable energy had different percentages in both countries.
To begin
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 with, conventional thermal usage in
Germany
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 was higher than in
France
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, with a contrast of nearly a half
percent
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.
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, the amount of renewable sources was higher in
Germany
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.
However
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, nuclear energy was the majority resource in
France
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, accounting for three in four of the proportions. Renewable energy from wind and biomass in
Germany
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 had almost equal shares.
Likewise
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, in
France
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, the difference was only 2.4%. Most of the electricity was generated by hydroelectricity in
France
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,
whereas
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 in
Germany
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 only accounted for 17.7%.
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, solar was the least used to generate electricity in both countries. There was not any geothermal usage either in
Germany
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 or
France
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, france with synonyms.
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