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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people believe that experiments that involve animals are morally wrong.
On the other hand
, other people think that these examinations are very important
due to
 the scientific and health progress. Personally, I think that these operations should be carried out with animals because of the danger. A large part of the population disagrees with the idea of experimenting with non-human creatures, they justify that it is morally wrong to experiment with them for human benefit and that humans believe that they are superior for the simple fact of being intelligent beings.
This
 community
also
 believes that wild creatures have rights as important as human ones and it is not only not being human that they should feel the pain of taking part in scientific research that can lead to death.
For example
, an experiment done by two Argentine scientists Diego Simeone and Julian Alvarez, has been sued by an animal protection activist group.
While
 these activists do not stop fighting, there is a public that totally agrees with these analyses. In fact, they claim that
due to
 its danger, trying it before with other creatures is the best option,
this
 is to say, they think that as an intelligent being with family, friends and feelings, it is less morally correct to search with it.
In addition
, an important argument that they transmit is that all these analyses are made for a good cause and to protect the population from many diseases.
For instance
, the London Laboratories, say that diseases
such
 as rabies or chickenpox have been slowed down for humans thanks to vaccines made in these observations.
To conclude
, even if there are many people who believe that wild beings should have the same living rights as bipedal ones, I think that it is always better to see first how it works with these beasts.
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task achievement
Acknowledge both perspectives more equally to strengthen the impartiality of the discussion.
coherence cohesion
Enhance paragraph transitions for smoother flow between contrasting views.
task achievement
The essay effectively presents both viewpoints on animal testing and provides a clear opinion.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-articulated, clearly delineating the stance and summarizing the discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethics
  • Morality
  • Vivisection
  • In vivo testing
  • Cruelty-free
  • Animal welfare
  • Biomedical research
  • Toxicology
  • Sentience
  • Compassionate
  • Humane
  • Speciesism
  • In vitro
  • Alternative methods
  • Pharmacology
  • Clinical trials
  • Bioethics
  • Animal rights
  • Pain threshold
  • Efficacy
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